suggestions on this songs

Renoise Songs
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hi

i try sinces few years a lot songs but my progress is slow.

today i arrived has this…https://www.dropbox.com/s/zag7u3yq2zaz1v4/bizarre%20mashine.mp3?dl=0

but i am novice.

I wait for your suggestions on this songs :yeah:

good listen :walkman:

thank you

olivier

(excuse me for my english language but i try to progress too) :panic:

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Hey olivier!

I am listening to your song right now. It has a nice industrial kind of feel. The mix is not too bad. The kick sounds nice and full. The bassline could perhaps use some more presence in the lower frequencies. The song has lots of variety, so does not become boring… However I also feel like the variety prevents it from being a cohesive track with a central theme.

2:50, really cool lead instrument and I really like the melody.

I see you come back to the intro theme at the end. It is almost like the bassline is playing its own melody here. It might work to add a lead instrument which plays harmony or countermelody during these sections… But that may just be a personal preference of mine (I like strong melodies :slight_smile: )

Keep up the good work!

-Scott

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hi ,

thank you to have to listen to my music.

I know that there is too much difference between every moment of the piece

However I also feel like the variety prevents it from being a cohesive track with a central theme.

i try exactly of varied but it is not so simple.

I have to redo the basic line so that is more realistic, By mixing the pieces

ok i understand what you told me

I am going to try to improve

thank you :yeah: