agree with patto that the ending could use some more work but i liked how you build it up to some kinda climax. perhaps it could use some bits of punk rap. some of the glitches felt a little to loud, personally i would use a deeper and longer kick or maybe layer the kicks.
overall it has a fresh mood in it which i really enjoyed
Thats quite crazy, in a good way.
I clicked the download link, and went away from the puter for a sec, and then it just started playing. I found myself smiling to myself, it was unexpected.
I think it is definitely salvagable.
I would try this:
Pull back a little on the distortion. Its a little too heavy on the ears at times.
Drop the second half completely. Anything after 1:22 or so.
The ending is good imo. Keep it. starting at around 2:36
I would try to take the first half, followed by the ending (2:36 and on) followed by a new pattern to serve as a bridge - i.e. only drums + small synth or so (maybe the offkey sine from the second part?)
I would try an arrangement like this: