I’m of two minds of this. It works the way it is. But the track does feel a bit mushy to me. Like wading through a swamp. I’d be inclined to turn the kick down a notch or two,yes.
If you don’t mind me saying, I think that long lingering portemento melody line is awful. Both in terms of it’s sound and the actual melody. Think it would be better served with a few rests in there. That could re-spark my interest in it. But now it just meanders. Some more interesting sound design would help, too.
To but it another way, I feel the sound is too attention grabbing as it right now for this kind of melody. It could work as a quiet background element. Almost like a pad. Provided some more interesting stuff happens in the foreground. If it’s gonna take center stage like it does now, it needs to step up its game and actually have a story to tell. That’s how I feel about it anyway.
@ToybOx Other than my usual comment, that you should put out full tracks & albums already, I don’t have much to say about this track… save that it’s wonderful! It’s fast, violent and like TNT says, not harsh. So very well done. Listened to it 4 or 5 times now and it continues to flips my cookie.
Go for it man! I’d love to hear your take on this kind of music. Maybe it can be your entry for MBC#16? 