Really nice song! Very catchy and fun. Here are some thoughts off the top of my head…
Your voice feels a bit small in the mix at certain times. Have you considered using some doubling techniques to beef it up? If you record 2 or 3 separate takes of the vocals, trying to keep them all pretty close to each other in terms of timing and what not, then layer/play them all together. This can create a really lush vocal sound where the subtle differences in each take interact with each other, and you can get a really delicious natural chorus effect from the tiny variations in pitch. It may not be suitable to use this technique on the whole song, but I think it could work well to emphasise certain parts.
Another thing I noticed is that a few of the words aren’t quite as clear as they could be, especially words that should have a prominent ‘t’ sound in them, so I would suggest to try and focus a little more on how you enunciate each word. I’ll quickly go over a few lines to show some examples… apologies if I got any of the lyrics wrong (kinda the point I’m trying to make, though)
The t in “take me” seems to be cut off almost like “-ake me”, so there’s not a lot of definition coming through there on the opening line. The word “these” sounds a bit too much like “this”, and the word “clear” is a bit rough sounding as well.
I’m having difficultly understanding a couple of words in this line
“Show me where the partying starts” <- is that right?
This line is sounding pretty good, especially the word “night” where you can easily hear the t at the end. The words really cut through the mix and sound clear and defined.
Instead of “wanna be”, I think it might work better to sing “want to be”. When you sing “wanna” it’s a little too undefined and muddy. I think “want to” would give you a clearer sound and might fit better.
Is that word “telling”? If so, try to place more emphasis on the t.
(ok, enough with all the t-sound nonsense )
I tend to agree with BYTE-Smasher regarding the bass - it feels a little bit weak at the moment. I realise it’s more of a pop song overall, but I don’t think it would hurt to boost the bass, to give it a richer sound with more character and impact.
Very nice work overall, though. I’d love to check out the XRNS