I’m not a native English speaker, but as far as I know English doesn’t use any direction like UP, ON or IN in the case of nose picking. So it’s “picking your/his/her/their nose”. Like you have in your opening sentence:
and down the blood flows
where it goes, nobody knows
that’s just the way it goes 
THat wont work in my song here is the lyrics.I dont know what to do
Once upon a time there was a little girl
Going through his stuff,picking up her nose
Feel free to suggest something different for-picking up her nose-
Ooh, I’ve never really written lyrics before.So I doubt I’m much help. But I am curious what is the story you want to tell?
Here are the full lyrics,nothing special, they just came to me while playing back a track i am making
Once apon a time there was a little girl
Going through his stuff,picking up her nose
Once apon a time there was a little boy
when she bacame his friend,he never felt alone-again
Oh my little girl!!!
Once apon a time there was a little girl
Lying on his bed,her smile was like the sun
Once apon a time there was a little boy
when she bacame his friend,he never felt alone-again
Oh my little girl!!!
Once upon a time there was a little girl
Going through his stuff, picking her nose
native english speaker here, this is correct. anything else will sound weird
or you could say digging in her nose
Damn i need something in-between picking her nose or it wont work
try digging in her nose. the meaning will be clear enough
Yessssssssssss that is what i needed!!!Thanksssssss
I am thinking this would be a track about a Platonic love/first love between two children and children dig into their noses all the time so it will fit nicely 
Bon appetit!
OK people here is something i am working on.Take a listen and feel free for any suggestions
Cool! With actual singing, too!! Nice!!!
Alrighty then! There is a lot to unpack here. First of, I really like the feel of this track. It has a lovely, lovely groove to it! The opening melody is sweet, though the reverb could perhaps benefit from taming the high end a bit.
The bass line that follows is cool! I like the pattern and the sound. It sets something up. And then when the vocals come in, I feel that the song doesn’t quite deliver. I think it should feel bigger there. Maybe you could try to give the kick and snare more weight. That they have more impact from that point onwards.
Speaking about the vocals, they sound very dry to me. I feel it could use a bit more processing. Maybe watch some youtube videos on how famous mixers set up their vocal chains for inspiration.
To my ears the music and lyrics don’t really gel that well together. The lyrics appear to be very innocent and uplifting. While the music sounds rather dark and kind of threatening. I’m all for juxtaposition-ing but in this case it doesn’t really work for me. Or better said, I’m not getting it. But maybe I’m missing something?
I’m not a fan of the long tail at the end. Think that stopping right after “oh my little boy” could be more of a statement. Now it just lingers a bit.
Anyway, that’s just how I feel about it. Regardless, nicely done @stoiximan !
Thanks for listening and for the tips.Its the first vocal recording so I will sing it in a more dark tone later on to fit the music.
The track is about a platonic/first love that went nowhere but after all these years the memories and the pain because that relationship didn’t evolve still hurts.
I’m not one of those who can give advice,
but right after the first notes it evoked Gary Numen in me.
Don’t ask why. I don’t know.
If there was more echo and reverb, it would remind me of Sisters Of Mercy a little.
Reverb is life and I wouldn’t mind echo at all when singing.
Good old dark days 
I did, and I like what I’ve heard. Imho this is your best one. And there’s potential for a Synthwave version. 
I really like your composition, the interaction of instruments, every melody and of course your singing as well. But you really need to be more careful while recording your singing. At the very end you can clearly hear a double mouse click to end your recording. Don’t hurry! Wait at least 5-10 seconds after your singing has ended before you stop recording. You also need to adjust the volume of your singing. Compared to the instrumentals it’s pretty loud. I don’t mind the dry sound, but your singing would benefit by putting a slight reverb on it and maybe cut some low ends The synth melody at the very beginning of your song sounds very familiar. I’m pretty sure that I know a track that has exactly the same melody, but I can’t tell which one. Anyway, it doesn’t matter, because it’s a very simple one and it fits to your song. I also especially like how you build up your song and how you bring back that melody at 1:29. Now you have to adjust the volume, because this melody is louder than the beat and the drums. And when it comes to the drums there’s still some work to do. The beat and especially the kick is pretty flat and silent without punch, furthermore it gets drown out by the sub and the synth bass, but especially by the sub. I think there’s too much bass in general, which leads to a muddy sound, too. Some cuts in terms of low end are recommended. You didn’t sidechain anything, did you? When I summarize everything I can say your song is great, but the mix is not. Improve the mix and your song will be much greater. And I’m really glad that you didn’t say “pick up your nose”. If you want to pick up your nose you must either have lost is somewhere before or your nose is waiting for you somewhere, for example at the train station. You can pick it up from the ground or you can pick it up from the train station or wherever. You got it! 
THanks friend.THis is the first take i posted here ,there is a lot to do and this is made in BitWig and i dont know this software very well but i figured why not try something different for a change ,and what do you know it came out beautifully, but i think it has nothing to do in what software we use,its us making it happen.Maybe when i finish this you will make a Synthwave version or a remix?.I miss the Renoise chorus in bitwig. We must ask taktik to make vst versions of all the effects if its possible.
There are already many different Chorus VSTs, just grab the one you like. So you’re using Bitwig now? I thought you were looking for hardware stuff to be able to turn knobs by hand.
If you wish and there’s some time left, why not? In this case just send me the stems of your singing and I’ll make something new out of it. Of course I would use Renoise and not Bitwig. But for now I’m looking forward to your fancy properly mixed version of your song. Just do it!
I got a electribe 2 and a Roland tr8s both used of cource,sold them both as they were not for me ,but i am still searching for hardware grooveboxes.What do you use?
You already know. This is my LEGENDARY home studio. 
Now I’ve also got studio monitors, but I don’t use them for mixing because they lack low ends. Instead I use my studio headphones and my 32 years old common hifi speakers. That’s all I need. No hardware, no knobs, just a computer, Renoise and several VSTs.
That’s a great sounding song! Love the '80s laid back vibe in there